Hey guys... mind if i pick your brain? How would you describe tucking to a non-skater? without pictures!
Its for a creative non-fiction class. I've been mucking around with it, but when you start saying "front foot 45 degrees tot he board, back knee tucked behind front knee, chest parallel to the ground, head in front, arms around sides, back foot on toe tips, hands kinda grabbing ur own butt..." it gets kinda long winded and confusing. =S the closest I could think of was speed skiing in winter olympics. They do kinda tuck... but it confuses the reader...
I kind of need it in the opening paragraph below, something better then the bolded text.
"7 a.m. Mountain highway, Mt. Dandenong. Each breath you take resounds in the full-face and fogs up your visor. Ignore the condensation forming on the inside. Once the run starts, the early morning mountain air will stream in and clear it up. Peering through the misty polycarb, you check for traffic. A thumbs up pops out of the chase car and it is a go. Push, push, push, tuck. Head first, body parallel to the ground, arms held tightly to your side. Think speed skiing, winter Olympics. The roar of urethane wheels hum inside the foam shell and the rushing wind is reduced to a dull whisper. Your visor clears and the first corner appears. You’re falling headfirst and it’s all downhill from here."
p.s -I know I can put my writing out here cuz its such a safe and nice environment.
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